First Holy Communion

Hooks to Begin Our Writing

	James		How far did I go?
	Sam S		“Weeee,” Blake thought.
	Jonty		“I thought that I was going to win the race but I didn’t,” said Jono.
	Blake		“I am going to win the race,” yelled Lily.
	Seb		“That’s my favourite,” said Tim.
	Margeaux		“I really want to get further than last time,” yelled Ruby.
	Finn		Run. Run. Run.
	John		“My legs are buried in sand,” giggled Ruby.
	Megan		“How long is it until the 9 year olds race?” I asked my Dad who was helping out with the athletics.
	Tim		“Go Lily go,” yelled the whole school.
	Sapphire		Did I do well?
	Lily		Logan thought “I am going to win the race.”
	Ruby		Jump. Jump. Jump
	Jacob		Wow! Did I beat my record?
	Dylan		“We are going to have a good time at long jump.”
	Ceanna		“Great job Ruby,” I yelled.

Direct Speech in our Writing

	Megan		“First we will practise with noodles,” Mrs McQuillan called to us.
	Lily		Mrs McQuillan said, “Have a duck beak”.
	Viennah		Lily shouted, “You have big straight arms.”
	Logan R		Lily yelled, “Your helicopter arms look like sharp knives”.
	Seb		“Nice straight arms,” said Samuel.
	Logan S		I announced, “My arms are the straightest.”
	Imogen		“Helicopter arms, bend low to high, clock hands and go!” shouted Mrs McQuillan.
	Samuel		Sapphire thought, “I’m going to throw the discus as far as I can”.
	Matthew		Seb muttered, “This is too hard”.
	Zach		“Mine will go further than yours,” yelled Sapphire.
	John		Margeaux whispered, “I wonder how far my discus will go?”
	Jacob		“Hurry up,” grumbled Tim.
	Dylan		Dylan exclaimed, “My throw was near yours!”
	Lauren		“Not so good,” laughed Lauren.
	James		“This is fantastic,” yelled James.

Learning About Writing

Making Our Writing More Interesting

This term our class has been learning ways to make our writing more interesting.

We have learnt many different ways but first I’m going to explain direct speech. Direct speech is recording exactly what someone said such as: “Hello Megan,” Mrs Bryant said to me when I entered the class in the morning.

Direct speech needs five different things: speech marks at the top of the beginning and the end of what the person has said, a capital letter for the first thing that they’ve said, the name of the person who said the thing you have written, a capital for their name and a powerful verb that describes how they said it.

Another thing we have been learning about is onomatopoeia. I already know what you’ll be thinking. What is onomatopoeia? Well simple to answer. Onomatopoeia is something that sounds like what it means such as swoosh and rustle.

The last thing I would like to share in my writing is similes. We have found over ten already in the “BFG” by Roald Dahl, and we haven’t even finished the book. I’ve done it again. I’ve forgotten to explain what similes are. Similes are comparing one thing with another such as, he watched the ball like an eagle watches his prey, or his cheeks blew up like huge ripe tomatoes.

Add all these things to your writing and your writing can become much, much more interesting, the same as all of ours’.

I’ve enjoyed writing this term a lot. Most of us have improved our writing a lot just by adding these things.

By Megan